~Colter Martin, Class of 2025
Chaos In My Room Colter Martin, Class of 2025 It’s a mess in my room Sheets are everywhere There are books on the floor The laundry is overflowing Oh, and I forgot to mention Clean clothes are not hung up The lamp is tipped over Dog fur covers my chair Furthermore, Brown mud is staining the carpet Dirty cleats are on the desk Ugh, and it smells like mold The soggy trash is tipped over And to add to the chaos, My closet wont close The bed screws are loose My desk looks like a bomb Eww, something weird is on the ceiling I wish it was nice and neat Like a military dorm But I don't want to clean it up Because there is too much else for me to do I live a busy life And I should just roll with it But the chaos is really bothering me So I'm going to organize my room
I really like how you use such great detail in describing your room. You talk on every little thing from the lamp to your dirty clothes overflow. Great job!
Colter, this is a great poem, you could use some more similes and metaphors throughout this poem. But I love the detail in the description. Keep up the good work.
Great job Colter! I enjoyed how descriptive you were while writing this poetry. You even went into great detail about a chair. Muy bueno.